Friday, July 14, 2023

Rhyming


Rhyming  adds rhytm, beauty,  solemnity to the text. I like it, and whenever possible, use it. There are rhyming dictionaries available in many languages,  and that helps  give the 'masses'  access to some basic form of rhyming 'poetry.'

Usually, it is the sad, tragic events in life that trigger the need to 'color' the text in rhymes-  at least in my case. I wrote about the loss of my dear ones in rhymed verses.

I composed  the speech for my Mom's funeral (delivered in hebrew to the participants) in three languages: romanian, hebrew, english - and used rhyming. 

Here' are some examples of rhymed little poems ( the english part only;  naturally, the romanian and hebrew parts are more elaborate, as I have a better knowledge  of these languages) :


Siblings

Mina-Ruhale, my elder sis.  I wish I could hug her and kiss.

I've got no photo of her, never had.  In Transnistria she starved to death.

Just try to imagine the tragic event:

A small girl in the concentration camp  

No food, no water, no air,  only disease.  

She closes her eyes, her tiny soul for Heaven leaves.

So, I never felt what's like

To have a sister by my side

Sharing things, dreaming together,

 making plans, helping each other.



Herman  (Hersh) my beloved brother

Tall, handsome, a real charmer

His virtuous playing the violin

Raised pleasure bumps on the skin

His great, catchy sense of humor

Became  a widely persistent rumor.

Suddenly, taken away from me

July 98, in Budapest, Hungary.

Hershole, my older brother

Was a Holocaust child survivor

Should have been given more years

To wipe out suffering and tears.


The Season Connection


In Spring,  Mom got ill and fragile.

It sure looked an ominous sign

In Summer, when all outside was bright

My mother and my brother Hersh, died.

In Autumn, with the sky cloudy and grey

Father David and nephew Shai, passed away

In Winter, in the cold, gloomy weather

We had to part from uncle Chaim forever.


68 comments:

  1. I love how you used poetry to remember family.

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  2. Thanks Marie. You've made my day.

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  3. this is a beautiful tribute to your family and I had never thought about using rhymes for this purpose. its truly touching and beautiful and I agree with you it is perfect. I do a lot of rhyming on my dogs blog but they are fun ones. So sorry you have lost so many of your loved ones.

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    1. Thank you for your very kind words.
      Rhyming can be used with any sort of text. It can add festivity, fun, solemnity.

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  4. Dear Duda, I honestly don't know what to say...
    God bless you always.

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  5. Such a moving tribute to lives lost and mourned. Thank you for sharing them.

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    1. '... lives lost and mourned' - indeed, so. Thanks for your kind comment.

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  6. I find poetry sooths me and allows creativity to flow. It's also a nice way to to pay tribute to your family and the memories you have. Very nice writing, I enjoyed reading it.

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    1. Right; poetry has a way of soothing and allowing one's feelings and thoughts to flow easily. I'm very glad you liked reading my post. Thanks a lot, Bill.

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  7. These are elegant and so moving, Duta. Thank you for sharing these touching tributes with us.
    Blessings!

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    1. I very much appreciate your opinion on my rhymed tributes, dear Martha. I like your use of the word 'elegant' here.

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  8. You write beautifully and capture such amazing memories. It was great reading this. Thanks so much.

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    1. Thanks for the compliments, Ellie. I am flattered.

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  9. What beautiful tributes to your family members. Such tragic losses too. I wish that I could write poems as eloquently as you. Am sure your family also appreciated them Janice

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    1. My siblings were tragic losses , indeed. The little sister died of hunger in the concentration camp in Ukraine ( I was born a few years later, at the end of the war); my brother died suddenly while watching the Mondial Cup in a hotel room in Budapest. His wife was already in bed trying to sleep.

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    1. Your poems are charming and touching, really lovely tributes to your lost loved ones.

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    2. Your poems are charming and touching, really beautiful tributes to your lost loved ones.

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    3. Pauline, dear, I'm glad you think so. The purpose of the tribute is to make my late dear ones, memorable - and rhyming helps with that.

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  11. This is beautiful and poignant. You wrote a beautiful tribute to all of them.
    So much loss...

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    1. Your word 'poignant', having the power to produce deep emotion, says it all about my post. Thank you, Mari.

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  12. Just wonderful poems, yet sad so beautiful Duta.

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    1. Sad, very sad as it is about human loss. (family loss).Yet, the writing style (rhymed verses) makes the poems look beautiful.

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  13. Dear Duta, what a beautiful and moving tribute to your cherished family. I am in tears reading it. Sending much love to you.

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    1. Thank you for your warm, heartfelt words. Much love to you too.

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  14. Rhyming , definitely, makes the text look and sound lovely.

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  15. Con estos bonitos versos, rinde un gran homenaje a tus seres queridos: pero la que me ha llegado al alma, es la muerte por hambre, en un campo de concentración, de tu hermana mayor, por la barbarie de otros seres humanos.
    Gracias por compartir tan entrañables recuerdos de familia, porque aunque tristes, nunca hay que dejarlos en el olvido, para que la Historia no se vuelva a repetir.
    Un fuerte abrazo, Duta.

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    1. I appreciate your reading the post, and leaving your comment, Manuel, although it mentions english rhyming.
      As for my little sister whom I've never known, she died in a concentration camp (Mogilev-Transnistria) in Ukraine. The ukrainians in those days were no better than the germans. Yet, I feel no vengeance. I hope they soon reach peace with the russians.

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  16. You have no photo of your older sister? That is doubly tragic :(

    My sister in law lost her parents and 6 siblings in the Holocaust, but at least she has the comfort of photos taken pre-1940. They were a handsome family.

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    1. No, no photo. She was only about two years old. My mother was on the way to Transnistra with her and my brother who was abot 4-5 years old. No time for photos.

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  17. Tristes recuerdos de aquellos momentos que te pesan hoy en día. Sobrellevar y ánimo.

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    1. Sad memories, indeed. Thanks for the encouragement.

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  18. Oh, Duta, my heart goes out to you.

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    1. Thanks, Sandi. That's rather strange that readers ,so far, haven't referred to the rhyming itself.

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  19. Your poetry sounds melancolic to me a very nice tribune to your family it's so terribly sad that your sister's life was taken so early from her.

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    1. Well, yes - melancholic ,pensive sadness; it fits the contents of the post that deals with loss of dear family members.

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  20. Your poetry is lovely, Duta, and so beautifully personal and poignant. That is a great deal of loss and you've beautifully put it into words with a sweet soulfulness and great depth of feeling. You have a talent for this. I'm sure the poems in your Hebrew and Romanian are even in greater depth and eloquence.

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    1. Your words, Jeanie, are a balm to my soul: soothing, healing, protecting. Above all, supporting and encouraging. Thanks a lot.

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    1. Thanks Mary, for your encouraging words.

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  22. It is good to remember our relatives, even those who are alive.

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  23. It is good to remember our relatives, even those who are alive.

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  24. I definitely agree with you, Norma. We should remember them both, the departed ones, and those who are alive.

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  25. I think rhyming in this case does a good job; it makes things more memorable. Thank you, Sandra for the kind words.

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  26. My tears flow freely....unhindered.. My heart breaks. My arms and best, warmest, kindest thoughts enfold you.

    Oh! Why is life so cruel...why are humans so cruel to each other...so wicked?

    Take care, DUTA...stay safe...you're a good person...please never lose sight of that.


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    1. Oית Lee, dear , you're a very sensitive person! Tears and heartbreaking are definite signs of sensitivity. I appreciate your caring for me.

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  27. A beautiful rhyming of the words.

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  28. Your words do me good. Thanks, Nancy.

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  29. We should remember ours. And keep the memory in our hearts.

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    1. Of course. Writing them dpwn, helps keeping the memories in our heart.

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  30. Beautiful writing and rhyming DUTA, brought tears to my eyes. For some of us writing is therapeutic, I know it helped me so much to blog about my dad. I'm sorry for all your losses, but I know they are in a better place, where we all hope to be someday. They are never truly gone forever as long as they live on in your heart and in your memory and now on your blog as well.

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    1. Coming from you, the words 'beautiful writing and rhyming'
      are a great compliment, Alicia. I've always appreciated your writing style.
      Writing can indeed be therapeutic, and as for the loss of beloved ones, the memories make them live forever in our hearts.

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    1. You mean the rhyming, Kathy. No doubt, it adds a lot to the plain text; that's why I like rhymes too.

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  32. It's hard enough rhyming in one language; I could not imagine three, or trying to translate your thoughts and emotions into two other languages. The first poem broke my heart and I can't imagine how emotional it would have been in your native language. I grew up knowing a number of Holocaust survivors as a child and I know I lost an uncle although I don't know exactly how.

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    1. The Holocaust is a terrible chapter in history. Things written about perished ones or survivors, no matter the language, are always very emotional and heart breaking.

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  33. Dear Duta,

    There will come a day
    When God will wipe all tears away
    There will be no more mourning, crying, death, or pain,
    As behold the One who is seated on the Throne
    Will make all things new
    And all His words are faithful and are true

    May this day be the turning of mourning to gladness
    Put our trust in our Saviour who takes all our sadness
    To those who believe
    is a crown and everlasting joy
    Sorrow and sighing will flee.
    He will do it, oh yes, we will see!!

    Much love and thank you for sharing your heart through rhyming verse.❤️

    Love,
Shayndel.

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    1. Beautiful! That's rhyming at its best. Yes, God, our Savior will put all things right for us.
      Love to you too, Shayndel.

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  34. Very well done on your writing and rhyming, although as I type this comment I am also reaching for a tissue.
    God bless Duta.

    All the best Jan

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    1. Thanks Jan, for your understanding and your encouragement.

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  35. Your sentiments are beautiful. I am sorry for your losses and the lack of a photo of your sister.

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    1. Your comment is kind and supportive! Thank you, e.

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